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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and2022

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and2022
The bar chart illustrates the number of residents of Iceland by
age
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groups
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group
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 from 1990 to 2020. Viewing from an
overall
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 perspective, it is clearly evident that across all
age
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 groups, the
amount
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number
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 of people between 25-54
years
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 old was dominant compared to others .
On the other hand
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, those who were over 55
years
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 old were low throughout the observation period, except in 2020 in which the
age
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 group of 15-24 was the lowest. Looking in more detail, those who were aged 25-54 comprised just over 30% in the first year, and it increased steadily over 30
years
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 until it reached its peak in 2020 at slightly below 50%, remaining as the highest contributor of the total population.
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, the number of residents who
was
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were
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 above 55
years
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 old remained stable, which was considerably low, and only changed by merely about 5%. People who were in the
age
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 groups of 0-14 and 15-24 were major contributors in the earlier period, totalling more than a half of the total population, but, they decreased gradually each 10
years
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 until they hit the bottom in 2020, which were slightly below 20% for the
age
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 group of 0-14 and marginally below 10% for the
age
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 group of 15-24, becoming the lowest proportion of the total population.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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