The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960.

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The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960. As can be seen from the first image, in 1960, just four locations comprised the area, including the main hospital itself.

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, over the course of 40 years, a variety of modifications

take

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have taken

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place.

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, the hospital building and the parking lot appear to

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retained their initial forms, with the rest having undergone numerous alterations, most of which

mainly

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insignificant.

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, by 1980, the shopping

centre

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to the left of the hospital was replaced by a cancer

centre

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and a

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pharmacy

Additionaly

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Additionally

, a portion of the farmland that sat behind the hospital seems to

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also

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been cleared to make room for a nursing school and what will in the future be the cancer

centre

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, one of the more noticeable changes that

occured

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occurred

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by 2000

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the cancer

centre

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, which had been expanded.

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, the nursing school was moved to the right and the car park shrunk down. The pharmacy and the main building

on the other hand

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remained largely unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

181 words

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The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960.

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

With internet improvement people can & opinions on certain goods or service that they purchased. Is this good or bad thing?.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?