The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960.

The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960. As can be seen from the first image, in 1960, just four locations comprised the area, including the main hospital itself.

However

, over the course of 40 years, a variety of modifications

take

Wrong verb form

have taken

show examples

place.

Overall

, the hospital building and the parking lot appear to

had

Wrong verb form

have

show examples

retained their initial forms, with the rest having undergone numerous alterations, most of which

mainly

Add a missing verb

are mainly

show examples

insignificant.

For example

, by 1980, the shopping

centre

to the left of the hospital was replaced by a cancer

centre

and a

pharamcy

Correct your spelling

pharmacy

Additionaly

Correct your spelling

Additionally

, a portion of the farmland that sat behind the hospital seems to

had

Change the verb

have

show examples

also

been cleared to make room for a nursing school and what will in the future be the cancer

centre

Furthermore

, one of the more noticeable changes that

occured

Correct your spelling

occurred

occur

by 2000

include

Wrong verb form

included

show examples

the cancer

centre

, which had been expanded.

As a result

, the nursing school was moved to the right and the car park shrunk down. The pharmacy and the main building

on the other hand

remained largely unchanged.

Submitted by dnm.best on Fri Oct 13 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

181 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when they buy new things; whereas in the past, old things were repaired and used again. What factors cause this phenomenon? What effects the phenomenon leads to?
In light of the rapid pace of change in various factors of the modern era, it has a significant impact on human behaviour. Among them is the behaviour of purchasing goods, when they buy new things they will throw away the old one rather than repairing or using it again as it happened in the past.
7
band
There is a historical building in your town and the city council wants to pull it down, because there is no money for repairs. You are not happy with this decision. Write a letter to the city council and say Why is the building important? Suggest a solution to finance the repairs.
I am Tajinder Singh, a resident of Brampton. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the decision to demolish a historical building in our town due to lack of financial resources.
4
band
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have investigated a lot of science nation and these research should be taken on by governments rather than private associations. In my opinion both of them are required by the people but ı agree with this topic. ı will outline the reason in the following paragraphs.
7
band
Men and Women have different qualities. Therefore, some people think that some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree?
People have different views on whether the two genders are separately suitable for distinct particular careers or not. While I can understand the reason why some people tip the balance in favour of making men and women have different jobs, I would argue that they could benefit more from concentrating on individuals instead of the classification of sex.
5
band
Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to in suburbs or countryside rather cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, traffic congestions and gridlocks are prevalent in the urban areas and this has resulted to urban to rural area migrations. Certain individuals opine that to mitigate traffic and transportation issues, people should be persuaded to live either in rural districts or outskirts of town rather than living in cities. In this essay I totally agree with the aforementioned.

The diagrams give illustrations as to how the Queen Mary Hospital has changed since 1960.

Nowadays, people always throw the old things away when they buy new things; whereas in the past, old things were repaired and used again. What factors cause this phenomenon? What effects the phenomenon leads to?

There is a historical building in your town and the city council wants to pull it down, because there is no money for repairs. You are not happy with this decision. Write a letter to the city council and say Why is the building important? Suggest a solution to finance the repairs.

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Men and Women have different qualities. Therefore, some people think that some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to in suburbs or countryside rather cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?