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The chart below shows what anthrop[ology graduates from one university did after fininshing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after 5 years

The chart below shows what anthrop[ology graduates from one university did after fininshing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after 5 years
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The table shows the percentage of salaries of anthropology graduates after 5 years of work,
while
 the pie
cahrt
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chart
 illustrates
destination
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 of the anthropologist reported from one university.
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, the information in the above diagram picturized about the
aluminis
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aluminise
 destination of the particular institutions and their type of employment and salary packages were 40% of degree holder who was working as a freelance
consultants
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 and a;
lso
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also
so
 50% of
peoples
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 working in government companies were earning around $100,000 plus.
Compare
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 to
private
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the private
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 sector both freelance consultants and government
sectors
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 employees were receiving
highest
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the highest
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 amount in their
professional
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. In the reference of
chart
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, they clearly mentioned that
the
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52% of
baccalaureate's
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baccalaureate
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working
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worked
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 as a full
timer
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timers
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,
this
 was the highest proportions compared with others who placed as a part-time worker
as well as
studing
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studying
 as a
post graduation
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. Some doing their masters in
correspondance
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correspondence
 course, 12%
was
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an
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unemployed
while
 very few were not known. Freelance consultants (40%) were
be
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paid around $75,000 to 100,000+ it was a
guge
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huge
 amount
were
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paid by the
administartions
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administrators
 to the workers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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