17.The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

17.The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts display the five aim why individuals
will
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would
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prefer to stay or leave
the
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apply
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Great Britain.
Overall
, quality of life is the biggest reason why
people
would choose to stay or leave in
United
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the United
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Kingdom. The
weather
and financial resources had a great difference in both charts,
while
the others are relatively similar. The biggest reason why
people
wanted to leave
UK
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the UK
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is because of the quality of life, with just above one-third of the
overall
share. The next biggest cause is the
weather
, with 22%,
moreover
, financial resources had just 2% less than the
weather
.
Employement
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Employment
and
join
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joining
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family and friends had the least proportions, with 15% and 9% respectively.
On the other hand
, 40% of
people
wanted to stay in the United Kingdom because of the quality of life. Almost one-third of individuals would stay in the country because of financial resources.
Furthermore
, employment only occupied 13% of the proportion, and the reasons
of join
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for joining
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family and friends, and
weather
are the biggest losers with only 10% and 7% of
people
respectively taking them as the reason of why they would stay.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, weather with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.

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