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There is a problem in the road outside your house. Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter, introduce yourself, explain what the problem is, and tell the councilors what you would like to be done.

#road #house #councilor #councilors
Hello , My name is Osama , I have two houses in
this
 neighbourhood, I have been living here for 10 years , We have never had problems on the road before ,
However
, In your management, The problem takes a long age ,
Moreover
, You didn't give us an answer when we call you ,
In contrast
 before if we have had some problems take a short time probably couple days
also
 they were replaying to any questions. One week ago we got overcast and the stormwater was broken by the heavy rain ,
Therefore
 we couldn't move easily ,
Also
 my tyre car is broken
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 the problem road . So , We hope you will cooperate and solve that in
a short hours
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, If you would take a long time , You had better come up with a temporary solution ,
Moreover
 , I need to apply
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compensation for the accident in my car . Thank you
also
 I'm looking forward to hearing back from you
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize the letter with clear paragraphs: introduction, details of the problem, and your requests.
task achievement
Expand on the implications of the problem to provide a more thorough response.
task achievement
You clearly introduce yourself and explain your personal experience in the neighborhood.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which aids in its formal tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Councilor – an elected representative for a local area who can address community problems.
  • Pothole – a depression or hollow in a road surface showing asphalt degradation.
  • Congestion – overcrowding or traffic blocking efficient movement.
  • Hazard – a danger or risk on the road that needs attention.
  • Resolution – a formal expression of intention or remedy to solve a particular issue.
  • Impact – the effect of a particular action or problem.
  • Community – the people living in an area collectively.
  • Urgency – the need for prompt attention to a pressing issue.
  • Remedy – a means of counteracting or eliminating something undesirable.
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