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Some students take one year off between finishing high and going to university, in order to travel or to work.

#students #year #university #travel #work
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Some high
school
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 graduates decide to take a
gap
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year
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 prior to furthering their education
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 university.
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 decision is not without its downsides, I believe it is largely a sensible choice because of the numerous benefits it offers. Taking a
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year
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 can prove
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 to
students
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 in some respects. The main concern here is
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 of enthusiasm towards academics after a long break.
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 is because some
students
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 are tempted to continue working or
traveling
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 once they experience the freedom and thrills that come with these activities.
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, the decision to discontinue
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their studies will hurt their employment prospects in the long run as they will not have a well-rounded education. Even when they do decide to
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 their education, they are likely to struggle with their studies following a more intriguing period of
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 or travel; they may see learning in a negative light – tedious or challenging. They, eventually, tend to lag behind their peers or drop out altogether. Despite these drawbacks, I would argue that a
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 off
school
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 does more good than harm. First of all, it helps
students
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 grow mature. A
year
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 off
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 spent working or travelling can be a chance to self-discover and broaden one’s outlook on life through exposure to different
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 environments and cultures.
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 an experience turns
students
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 into self-aware and mature individuals. Not only that, but
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 can
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 acquire some
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 experience by trying different jobs, which allows them to
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 discover their interests. Having realized where their interests lie, they can choose the right major later in university.
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 but not least, a
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year
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 is a much-needed break from academic studies for
students
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 experiencing mental
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. These
students
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 can return to
school
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 feeling rejuvenated and recharged having engaged in non-academic pursuits
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work
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 and travel. In conclusion, granted, taking a
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year
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 has some minus points, but I am convinced that its upsides ranging from self-growth to a necessary escape from academic life are more substantial.
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