The cost of international travel is decreasing, and so the trend of international tourism is increasing in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the rising trend of tourism for countries?

I strongly believe that
this
academy is best suited for me because
this
academy was established in 1843 and is one of the oldest universities in the UK.
This
university
has some policies and procedures like health and wellbeing strategy, raising a concern, equality and diversity, sustainability information, pledges and commitments, health and safety, information security and many more. Even though
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all the information provided on the
university
website is very clear
therefore
everyone can understand it very easily.
Additionally
,
this
academy's
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provide
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accommodation
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budget.
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, the vision of
this
university
is very clear
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helping drive innovation through the fusion of industry and academic research. The support team have excellent business knowledge in world-renowned industry expertise.
This
university
runs a win-win mutually beneficial mode, which
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on maximising revenue generation, risk management, productivity,
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and brand enhancement by
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transferring
transforming
innovative ideas, research results and skills unique to the
university
with business and the wider community to enable innovative new products, services and processes to be developed.
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The essay does not address the given topic. Focus on discussing the advantages and disadvantages of the rising trend of tourism for countries.
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Improve the organization and structure of the essay. Ensure that ideas are presented in a logical manner and paragraphs are coherent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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