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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will one day replace face-to-face education. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In a world, where we spend a significant amount of time on the Internet, online
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 experiences a strong increase in popularity.
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 some people expect that e-learning could take the place of face-to-face
education
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, I agree with the proponents of
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 view that it cannot be a substitute for traditional
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. The popularity of
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education
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 results from their flexible and easy access
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 Youtube, Instagram and other distinct features are the main
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 why a significant amount of
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young people have a habituation in these and exhibit strong digital skills.
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, it is relatively easy for them to acquire new abilities through online
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.
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, online courses could be accessed without assembling
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 a significant location and
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 video recording possibilities a pre-defined schedule is not mandatory.
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, students could organise their
education
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 individually.
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, from the advocates’ perspective,
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 gained flexibility is beneficial for acquiring abilities, I agree with the proponents that for
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 extensive
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 discussing the study content face-to-face in groups is another fundamental aspect. For expanding your knowledge, repeating and reflecting
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 subject from several perspectives are key factors for success.
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 to online
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, the traditional educational approach
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 students a group to discuss and reflect
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 subject together.
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 way of learning, online
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 is limited in providing discussion possibilities for its pupils. In conclusion,
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 many see online
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 as a new approach
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 our
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 system, I agree with those who evaluate the traditional way of learning as irreplaceable. It is clearly important to consider the value of face-to-face discussions and reflections for successfully acquiring new abilities and skills
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