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Dicuss both side the goverment shout invest money in wildlife project and protect them or invest money in other projects?

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Protecting
wildlife
 is always an important issue nowadays because
the
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 positive issues that people have brought to
wildlife
. In
this
 article, we are going to concentrate on the aspect should authority invest in
wildlife
projects
 or not. Some opinions indicate that the
government
 should invest in
wildlife
projects
 and protect them. Because of human activities,
wildlife
 has been distracted or even deleted,
therefore
, the habitat of many animals has been destroyed.
Accordingly
, there should be rules or deals that can invest and protect
in
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the
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wildlife
. That will reduce the
damages
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 generated by humans.
In addition
, the power of authorities
are
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 usually large enough to make their project going to force effectively
while
 any other organization can not have
such
 as attracting resources.
In contrast
, some opinions
indicated
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 that
government
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the government
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 should invest money in another project because investing in
wildlife
projects
 and protecting them is only resolved at the top of the reason. To resolve all issues, the
government
 should delete the original reasons for the damages
such
 as replacing the use of
nilon
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nylon
 bags with cotton bags or paper bags. That will lead to the reduction of nylon waste in the environment that's mean protecting
wildlife
 for the final purpose.
Accordingly
, in my opinion, we should combine both types. The
government
 should invest in
wildlife
projects
 and other programs. Investing directly in
wildlife
projects
 helps us resolve problems rapidly
however
 temporarily. Meanwhile, investing in other programs can not resolve issues immediately
however
 it can delete the resources of problems. In conclusion, the
government
 should combine
both
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investing in
wildlife
 or other
projects
 to achieve the best goals and make our lives better.
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