some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. others say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. discuss both views and give your opinion.
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health
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some believe that, the best method is to raise Linking Words
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also
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activity
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health
.
On the one hand, the benefits of Use synonyms
exercise
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activity
cannot be ignored, because, our body creates a majority of muscles and every one of them just becomes stronger with physical movement. Use synonyms
For example
, if professional athletes are not active regularly, their bodies can become weak. Linking Words
Secondly
, when humans ‘hearts are active and pump rapidly within Linking Words
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activity
, is are healthier and do not collect much fat around themselves. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, blood pressure stays at a normal range. Even Linking Words
people
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exercise
. So, the authorities have to prepare Use synonyms
sports
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people
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, in my opinion, Linking Words
sports
are not the only way to increase public Use synonyms
health
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On the other hand
, to have a healthy society, Linking Words
people
need to care about both their physical and mental aspects. Use synonyms
Firstly
, food and overusing harmful substances Linking Words
such
as drugs and alcohol have a huge drawback effect on Linking Words
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health
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Therefore
, if humans want to have healthy lives, they have to choose a rich lifestyle with a balanced diet, avoiding smoking and drinking alcohol and regular Linking Words
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Moreover
, the hectic days cause stress on peoples' minds so, they should care of their brain and their emotions, with relaxing activities Linking Words
such
as meditation, and yoga, and being in touch with nature, which can help them stay in a normal mood.
In conclusion, Linking Words
although
improving Linking Words
exercise
with increasing Use synonyms
sports
facilities has a positive effect on public Use synonyms
health
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also
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activity
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