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Band 7.5

You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time -say what action you would like to take

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Dear Madam, I hope you are doing great. I am Tajinder Singh and am writing
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 letter to formally inform you that I am unable to attend my remaining part-time project management course of the evening batch at your institute. As you already know, I am currently working as a full-time assistant junior engineer in a multinational company, and my working hours are from 5am to 3pm. Previously, I was managing my time very well for both the company and my evening program. Unfortunately, my company assigned me one more project for the upcoming months.
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 why; I have to give some extra time to my work. Sadly, I have to discontinue my evening classes because it is impossible to manage
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 a tight schedule for at least the next 6 months.
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, I want to resume my studies after finishing my project. I request you to kindly accept my apology.
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, help me to close my account temporarily, and give me details about my remaining fee. I would be very grateful if you could respond to me as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully, Tajinder Singh

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greeting and closing
The greeting used is informal; consider replacing 'Madam' with 'Dear Course Tutor,' for increased formality appropriate to the situation.
logical structure
The logical structure is coherent but could be enhanced by creating stronger links between paragraphs.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph largely sticks to one idea, which is good, but try to vary your sentence structures for better coherence.
complete response
It's clear what you are asking for, but expanding on how this situation affects your studies could enrich your task achievement.
suitable writing tone
The tone is mostly suitable, but some informal phrases ('doing great') could be replaced for consistency in formality.
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