The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The map shows how Islip
town
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centre
now
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and the proposed redevelopment plan.
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, the layout of the plan shows how the
road
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path will be built around the
town
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for better traffic flow.
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, convenience for vehicles will be added
such
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car
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park and bus station. New housing for residents will
also
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take place in most parts of the area. The main
road
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from the current map is located in the middle, which serves the west and east
side
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of the
town
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.
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in the proposed layout, the main
road
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will only be used by pedestrians and a dual carriageway
road
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that goes around the
town
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will be available from west to east. Looking at the north side of the remained shops, a bigger shopping centre will replace the array of shops before. For shopping convenience, a bus station and car parks on both sides of the shopping centre.
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,
on
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the northern east and southern
area
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of the remained shops, previous houses were relocated to make room for more residential facilities.
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, the park has visibly minimised in size
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houses and
road
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path
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paths
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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