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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table represents consumer spending in 2002 on dissimilar items in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and
Turkey
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, measured in percentage.
Overall
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, the highest consumer spending is on Food/Beverages/Tobacco in
Turkey
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,
whereas
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shopper
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shoppers
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cost
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spend
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lowest
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the lowest
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 money on
Leisure
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/
Education
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 in Spain and
level
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levelled
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 off by the
others
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other
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 four divergent countries. The buyers
on
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in
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 Italy and Sweden showed approximately 16.36% and 15.77% on Food/Beverages/Tobacco, respectively.
Following
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this
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, in
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Leisure
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the Leisure
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/
Education
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 aspect the two countries
also
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 appear around 3%.
However
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 Spain’s
constumers
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consumers
costumers
on
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of
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 Food/Beverages/Tobacco
in
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are in
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 third
placed
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place
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 which
nearly
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is nearly
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 a fifth,
its
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it
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 placed the least to
Leisure
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/
Education
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.
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, there is
few
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little
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 money spent on
Leisure
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/
Education
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 which
is
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apply
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Turkey
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on
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first
placed
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place
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 with 4.35%. In Clothing/Footwear, Ireland, Spain, and
Turkey
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 shared roughly percentage with nearly a sixteenth, as regards Italy obtained nearly
a
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an
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 eleventh and made its country
being
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apply
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the
tops
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top
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 spender in it.
Nonetheless
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,
in
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apply
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this
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 category with just below 6% brought Sweden to the lowest section.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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