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The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause? What are the solutions to address those problems?

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Currently, every nation's population is increasing significantly.
However
, the distance between rich and poor has been rising rapidly and those who are rich will become richer
hence
 poor guys become poorer. The main
problem
 is that poor
people
 can not receive a high-quality
education
 and
also
 do not get much interest from provides by the government side, and the efficient solution is to subsidize those who need
education
. The most noticeable and dangerous
problem
 is needy communities think that they do not need to be educated. Basically, Labour Work has been attaching them day by day, so their children have no need to study or their families can not pay for the tuition, and their social status made them can not get enough perks. Every year they provide funds for ineligible
people
 but some
people
 use
this
 for investment funds. In my country, a large amount of money was used for purchasing new overseas goods
instead
 of supporting the poor
people
. Handling
this
problem
 is necessary,
It is clear that
 they should provide fees which are essential like for
education
 or medical care. Another solution is developing an internet system, and bringing it to everybody in remote areas, it is useful when the government support them in buying smart devices. It is not impossible, in 2019 our government supported the
people
 who were having distance issues to reach the nearest facilities when COVID-19 was spreading. In summary, the rich become richer but the poor become poorer
this
problem
 is based on the fact that it is hard for the poor to get a good
education
.
Nevertheless
, providing free
education
 can solve these issues easily.
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