Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Nowadays an increasing number of people are becoming concerned about
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their academic or various types of abilities studying together.Some people assert that
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their
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state that they need to take
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o shall discuss both sides of the argument,and explain why
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with the latter viewpoint.
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and foremost thing that some people feel is that most
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have one talent for only one subject
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compared
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as if there are mathematicians in the family, the child is more interested in mathematics than in other subjects.Personally,I believe that
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parents should give their son or daughter to a
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specializing in basic sciences.
On the other hand
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would prefer to study in
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school
rather than
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place.It should
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remembered
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mixed schools. For
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country children choose their education place themselves without asking permit from
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their
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for their future. to summarize all given information and opinions,my own opinion is that there is truth in both views.
However
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convenient
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have confidence in the
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that study mixed
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Your essay addresses both views, but there is room for improvement in providing a more comprehensive response with relevant specific examples to support your arguments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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