Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Nowadays an increasing number of people are becoming concerned about

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their academic or various types of abilities studying together.Some people assert that

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children have to choose

according to

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their

abilities

while

other

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state that they need to take

according to

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o shall discuss both sides of the argument,and explain why

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with the latter viewpoint.

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and foremost thing that some people feel is that most

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have one talent for only one subject

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compared

to others.

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as if there are mathematicians in the family, the child is more interested in mathematics than in other subjects.Personally,I believe that

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parents should give their son or daughter to a

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specializing in basic sciences.

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would prefer to study in

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mixed schools. For

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country children choose their education place themselves without asking permit from

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for their future. to summarize all given information and opinions,my own opinion is that there is truth in both views.

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,even though some individuals feel that

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opposing viewpoint.I

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coherence cohesion

Work on organizing your ideas in a more structured manner. Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant to the topic.

task achievement

Your essay addresses both views, but there is room for improvement in providing a more comprehensive response with relevant specific examples to support your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

233 words

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