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Band 6

write a referral letter to the renal clinical nurse specialist at the bunbury community health centre

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I am writing to refer
Mr
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 Daller
Walter
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 who has undergone catheter insertion for CRF. He requires your continued care and education on his renal status. Now he is set to be discharged today.
Mr
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Walter
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 was admitted to our care
on16
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on 16
 June with worsening symptoms of renal failure for which he
undergone
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underwent
has undergone
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 insertion of
continuous
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a continuous
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 ambulatory peritoneal dialysis catheter for CRF. During hospitalization, he experienced
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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 in potassium level
and
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but
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 is currently normal range. His hospital stay
prolonged
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 because of the slow
learned
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learning
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 by
Mr
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 and Mrs
Walter
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 about the management of his condition.
Mr
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Walter
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 is a schizophrenic and has mild chronic delusions.
However
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 ,his mental status was stable.Currently , he is on
disability
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a disability
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 support pension. His wife,
the
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 primary carer of him.
But
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, she has
mild
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a mild
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 intellectual disability. He has a history of CRF for 4 years.He has had a history of diabetes which is managed by oral medication. I would highly appreciate it
,
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 if you could educate
Mr
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 and Mrs
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walter
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Walter
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 about the procedure including prevention of infection via catheter and signs of peritonitis. Kindly educate him about the
important
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on
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of
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 minimising
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on
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in
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 his diet. Kindly monitor him for any signs of
increase
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 psychosis and seek
meadical
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medical
 attention, if necessary . If you have any queries ,don't hesitate to contact me.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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