Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays all over the world, people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits, TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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many receive the same media and adopt a homogeneous culture in terms of entertainment, fashion and other areas as

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who believe that it will lose the identities of their culture and civilization.

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phenomenon. The improvements in communication technologies have increased cultural and language interchange between

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fashion, devices, lifestyle and languages from foreign

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the young generation.

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wear the same clothes, use the same devices, eat the same food, listen to the same music, watch the same movies and speak the same language. It is a good phenomenon in some aspects

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without boundaries.

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as the loss of traditional customs which have begun to melt with foreign ones and will later disappear.

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are going to lose their identity

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as traditional clothes, manners and ethics.

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are not as healthy as they were in the past because they always eat unhealthy food

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the trends of modern society and advertisements.

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their identity, I agree that the advantages of

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, we need to preserve the cultural identity and protect our

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from the deterioration of the good merits.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cultural globalization
Cultural exchange
Cross-cultural communication
Assimilation
Homogenization
Acculturation
Traditional customs
Local economies
Diversity
Inclusion

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

Discuss the Impact of E-Money on Financial Inclusion in Indonesia!

Some sports are considered extremely dangerous, but many people still like them. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.