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The chart below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non renewable engergy in the United states in 2009 and 2019.

The chart below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non renewable engergy in the United states in 2009 and 2019.
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The graph represents the
electricity
 generated using renewable and
non renewable
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non-renewable
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energy
 in the United
states
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 in the
year
 2009-2019.
Overall
,
the
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coal and natural gas produced high
electricity
 in
non renewable
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non-renewable
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energy
source
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sources
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.
Hydro electric
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Hydroelectric
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 and wind produce more
energy
 compared to
others
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other
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 in renewable
engery
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energy
source
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sources
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. In detail, petroleum
produce
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produces
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 57
billion
 of
electricity
 in the
year
 2009 and less in the
year
 2019. Solar
produce
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produced
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 73
billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 per
hour
 in 2019
whereas
, it is producing
less
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fewer kilowatts
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kilowatt
 than wind
energy
.
Geotheormal
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Geothermal
 is the
least producing
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least-producing
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 renewable
energy
source
 compared to others. Coal
produces
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produced
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 a large number
energy
 in 2009
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but
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where
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but
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 it
produces
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produced
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a
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less in 2019. In brief,
the
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plant and animal matter generate about 54-58
billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 of
energy
 in
the
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both
the
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years.There is no big difference
in
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 them. Natural gas
produce
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produced
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 921
billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 per
hour
 in 2009 which
generate
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generated
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 less than 2019 is 1582
billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 per
hour
. In renewable
energ
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energy
source
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sources
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 hydroelectric
yield
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yielded
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same
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the same
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billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 per
hours
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hour
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 during the
year
 from 2009-2019. US
electricity
is
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generated from renewable is 437
billion
kilowatt
 in the
year
 2009 and 720
billion
kilowatt
 per
hour
 in
theyear
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the year
year
 2019. There is a difference in generating the
electricity
 from the
year
 between ten years (2009-2019).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, energy, year, source, billion, kilowatt, hour with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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