The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The line graph depicts the proportion of
tourists
exploring a particular Caribbean
island
, within seven years, from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
,the
number
of
tourists
, who like discovering a Caribbean
Island
, increased throughout seven years. On the one hand, the total
number
of
tourists
rose dramatically from 2010 to 2017. Beginning from 2010 till 2017, the
number
of
tourists
who preferred staying on cruise ships or staying on the Caribbean
island
changed sharply. Visiting
island
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the island
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became popular and counted was 3.5
overall
.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
tourists
who chose to stay on cruise ships increased sharply. From 2010
till
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to
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2012, the
number
of
tourists
fluctuated and reached its minimum in 2012c, counting about 0.3. Next five years, exploring the
island
on cruise ships became famous and reached its maximum peak in 2017, estimating 2 respectively. Following that, the
number
of visitors who preferred being on the
island
grew slightly. From 2010 to 2013, the
number
of visitors changed, counting 1.5 respectively. Starting from 2013 till 2017, the
number
of visitors remained constant.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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