The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

#process #sugar #cane

This

diagram represents the manufacturing

process

for making

sugar

from

sugarcane

.There are some methods involved in

this

process

Overall

sugarcane

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is processed

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process

to produce

sugar

through various steps. In detail, the manufacturing

process

involve

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involves

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seven steps.They are growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice,

evaporator

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evaporating

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centrifuge

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centrifuging

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and drying and cooling. The first step in

this

process

is growing

sugarcane

within 12-18 months.

Sugarcane

is grown with proper water and

nutrients

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content in the soil.The second is harvesting

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which

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is done with two methods one is

manually

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manual

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and another is

mechinal

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mechanical

harvesting. Harvesting is done after

18months

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18 months

of cultivation. Manual harvesting takes

long

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a long

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time

complete

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to complete

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the work

whereas

mechinal harvesting takes

short

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a short

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time to complete the work

with

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within

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given

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a given

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period.After harvesting

sugarcane

is put into

the

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process

called crushing,

after

this

method it

converted

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is converted

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into juice. The fourth step in

this

process

is purifying juice using

limestone

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a limestone

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filter. And

the

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apply

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next,

it gets heated and vapour is evaporated and it turns into syrup.

Centrifuge

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A centrifuge

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is the sixth step

that

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which

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means it separates

sugar

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into

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crystals from

syrup

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the syrup

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. The

last

process

is drying and cooling and

then

sugar

is ready.

Thee

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These

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seven methods

plays

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play

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a vital role in the manufacturing

process

for making

sugar

from

sugarcane

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

We were asked these three questions: What emerging technologies are stirring up privacy concerns today? What makes those concerns similar or different to those surrounding the printing press, photography, and the computer? Do you think those concerns are valid?

Some argue that music mainly serves as a way for individuals to reduce their stress and anxiety. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.