The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
This
diagram represents the manufacturing
process
for making
sugar
from
sugarcane
.There are some methods involved in
this
process
.
Overall
,
sugarcane
is
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process
to produce
sugar
through various steps. In detail, the manufacturing
process
involve
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seven steps.They are growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice,
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,
centrifuge
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centrifuging
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and drying and cooling. The first step in
this
process
is growing
sugarcane
within 12-18 months.
Sugarcane
is grown with proper water and
nutrients
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content in the soil.The second is harvesting
it
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which
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is done with two methods one is
manually
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and another is
mechinal
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mechanical
harvesting. Harvesting is done after
18months
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18 months
of cultivation. Manual harvesting takes
long
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time
complete
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the work
whereas
mechinal harvesting takes
short
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a short
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time to complete the work
with
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given
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period.After harvesting
sugarcane
is put into
the
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a
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process
called crushing,
after
this
method it
converted
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is converted
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into juice. The fourth step in
this
process
is purifying juice using
limestone
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a limestone
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filter. And
the
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next,
it gets heated and vapour is evaporated and it turns into syrup.
Centrifuge
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A centrifuge
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is the sixth step
that
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which
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means it separates
sugar
to
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crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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. The
last
process
is drying and cooling and
then
sugar
is ready.
Thee
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These
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seven methods
plays
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a vital role in the manufacturing
process
for making
sugar
from
sugarcane
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, sugarcane with synonyms.
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