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Do you think if the government should limit the freedome of the media?

#government #limit #freedome #media
The level of state
control
 over
media
 is a controversial debate.
While
, there are countries where television and radio channels, newspapers, and news websites are either state-owned or the government has unlimited
control
 over, there are others that the
freedom
 of
speech
 is granted as a basic human
rights
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. I believe that unless an entity expresses hate
speech
 or criminal content, it should be completely free to publish whatever it wants. First of all, an open space for
media
 outlets
make
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 them naturally
control
 each other. Just like the nature of
free
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 market, where the market sustains itself by supply and demand, the
freedom
 of
news
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 market automatically turns into a controller space.
For instance
, CNN, a television news channel leaning towards the United
States'
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States
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 Democratic Party,
factchecks
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fact-checks
fact checks
FoxNews's
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Fox News's
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 stories, and vice versa. In case where one of these two publishes something untrue, the other channel, because of political rivalry, immediately tells the truth. So,
this
 automatic
control
 process eliminates the need for
further
control
 by governments.
Furthermore
, the unlimited benevolent state
control
 over
media
 turns into a malignant dictatorship. In fact, every entity with
unlimited
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 source of power could easily turn into a dictator. Not only is government
control
 a threat to the
freedom
 of
speech
, but it would make them the
loud speakers
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 of dictators' propaganda. In the Democratic Republic of Korea, famously known as North Korea, the government has the strictest
control
 over whatever people can watch, listen, or read.
Unsurprisinly
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Unsurprisingly
, the DPRK is the most famous dictatorship in the world. Simply, I think there cannot be
a
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strict
control
, without the risk of dictatorship. In conclusion, the
freedom
 of
media
 should be granted for several reasons.
First,
it is the
freedom
 of
speech
 that saves and controls the truth-telling, and
second,
a power with good will
turn
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 into a power with malignant intentions if it gains
the
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unlimited
control
.
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