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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinions

#people #experiences #children #school #effect #future #life #teenagers #influence
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There is a perception that the best option for
children
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’s
further
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life
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 is their
pre-
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pre-school
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school
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experience
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, rather
that
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than
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 the
experience
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,
which
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apply
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they gain in their teenage time. I believe that
experience
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 gotten / got / received at an early
age
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 does not have as much functionality and high value as
experience
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 gained at an older
age
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. On the one hand, in pre-
school
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 years
children
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 get basic
experience
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. At
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age
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,
children
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 acquire basic social
skills
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 for social interaction and preliminary knowledge of
school
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 subjects. Parents try to interest their
children
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 in activities that may be aimed at preparing them for
school
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,
as well as
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 developing their horizons and outlook outside
school
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 (various sports, music clubs
and
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etc.).
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 is aimed at ensuring that the child develops gradually and understands which areas in
life
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 are of interest to them for
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 development.
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 helps the child to gradually become an individual and to identify more easily in
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life
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.
On the other hand
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, gaining
experience
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 at an early
age
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 does not make it possible to use it over a long period of
life
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, because it loses relevance. Every day
children
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 are developing, learning and analysing new information and improving their
skills
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, which makes it hard to use only experiences from an early
age
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.
However
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,
experience
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 in
teenage
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the teenage
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 years is added up by more intense events and different situations, through which
children
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 can come to certain conclusions by analysis,
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then
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the
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experience
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 becomes relevant and can be used in modern
life
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. Examples:
communication
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are communication
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skills
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 (teenagers learn how to overcome conflicts, friendships, romantic
relationship
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relationships
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 (the time when teenagers go on dates for the
first
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 time,
first
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 relationship,
first
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 breakup),
first
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 job (part-time jobs which teach them responsibility and help them get the hang of what it is like to work + learn some
skills
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 necessary for working later) In conclusion, gaining
experience
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 in pre-
school
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 years
cannott
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cannot
 be widely used in later periods of people’s
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life
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lives
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, because it is basic and not so extensive. I believe that
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 is not the best way to deal with situations and problems and analyse them in the future. It requires relevant and more fulfilling experiences.
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