You are getting married. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend to invite him/her to the wedding. •In your letter describe who you are going to marry, •tell what will happen on the wedding day (the schedule), explain why it’s important him/her be at the wedding.
Dear Sahar,
It
is
a long time Wrong verb form
has been
we
Correct word choice
since we
do not see
each other, what’s up? The Verb problem
saw
last
time that we spoke with
Change preposition
on
cellphone
, your mother Correct pronoun usage
your cellphone
was
a little sore throat, is she better at the moment?
I have Verb problem
had
a
surprising news, in Correct determiner usage
some
fact
I am going to marry next month, and guess who he is? As a matter of fact, we going to marry Add a comma
fact,
with
my co-worker who Change preposition
apply
introduce
you at the Wrong verb form
introduced
last
seminar in
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
last
autumn. His name is Ali and now, he works as a
interior management at my firm.
I Correct article usage
an
explain
Wrong verb form
explained
every thing
that we Correct your spelling
everything
will
do until our wedding day, at Wrong verb form
would
first,
we prepared for informal
taking Correct article usage
an informal
photo
at my father’s house with our immediate family and close friends, Add an article
a photo
the photo
then
we Correct word choice
and then
attend
at official ceremony office where located in the city Wrong verb form
attended
center
at Change the spelling
centre
11
a.m. after that my husband Correct article usage
the 11
an
I hold a dinning party at my grandparent restaurant with a famous singer and his band.
SinceCorrect your spelling
and
,
we have known each other for 20 years, I assumed that the best person who can lecture about me, is youRemove the comma
apply
are
, so it is really important that you will attend Unnecessary verb
apply
in
my wedding ceremony.
Again, I Change preposition
apply
am so
appreciate Verb problem
would
if
you Correct pronoun usage
it if
join
us, and in fact, I am available if you have any questions.
Best Wishes,
SaraWrong verb form
joined
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greeting and closing
The greeting and closing in the letter are not appropriate for a formal invitation. Use a more formal tone.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more details about the wedding day, such as the date, time, and location of the ceremony.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Consider separating the information about the wedding day into its own paragraph.
grammatical range and accuracy
Check the grammar and punctuation in your letter. There are several errors that make the writing difficult to understand.
suitable writing tone
Use a more formal and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Avoid using slang or informal language.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
