You are getting married. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend to invite him/her to the wedding. •In your letter describe who you are going to marry, •tell what will happen on the wedding day (the schedule), explain why it’s important him/her be at the wedding.

Dear Sahar, It
is
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has been
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a long time
we
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since we
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do not see
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each other, what’s up? The
last
time that we spoke
with
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on
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cellphone
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your cellphone
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, your mother
was
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had
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a little sore throat, is she better at the moment? I have
a
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surprising news, in
fact
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I am going to marry next month, and guess who he is? As a matter of fact, we going to marry
with
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my co-worker who
introduce
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you at the
last
seminar
in
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the
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last
autumn. His name is Ali and now, he works as
a
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interior management at my firm. I
explain
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every thing
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everything
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that we
will
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do until our wedding day, at
first,
we prepared for
informal
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taking
photo
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at my father’s house with our immediate family and close friends,
then
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and then
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we
attend
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at official ceremony office where located in the city
center
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at
11
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the 11
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a.m. after that my husband
an
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and
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I hold a dinning party at my grandparent restaurant with a famous singer and his band. Since
,
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we have known each other for 20 years, I assumed that the best person who can lecture about me, is you
are
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, so it is really important that you will attend
in
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my wedding ceremony. Again, I
am so
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appreciate
if
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it if
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you
join
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us, and in fact, I am available if you have any questions. Best Wishes, Sara
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greeting and closing
The greeting and closing in the letter are not appropriate for a formal invitation. Use a more formal tone.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more details about the wedding day, such as the date, time, and location of the ceremony.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Consider separating the information about the wedding day into its own paragraph.
grammatical range and accuracy
Check the grammar and punctuation in your letter. There are several errors that make the writing difficult to understand.
suitable writing tone
Use a more formal and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Avoid using slang or informal language.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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