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The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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The maps provided illustrate the layout of Grange
Park
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 in 1920
,
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 when it was established and how it is today.
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, the
park
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 has undergone substantial changes and re-arrangements since it was first opened and what
stand
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 out most from
the
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both plans is that many new facilities were added like
amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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,
children's
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 playground and a small restaurant. In 1990, a fountain was located in the
center
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 which has been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats that have been moved from all edges of the ground in the recent map.
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 that, an amphitheatre for concerts has been constructed in place of the stage for musicians. An underground car
park
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 has been built
in
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the
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below the
park
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, the entrance for which is from the lower right side just behind the new water feature which was added replacing the glasshouse. On the far end eastern corner of the recreational ground, a children's play area has been made where there used to be a pond for aquatic plants.
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, a cafe stands near
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where a rose garden was situated in 1990.
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, other rose gardens were
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 removed leaving the one above the amphitheatre.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • developments
  • modifications
  • landscaping
  • recreational needs
  • enhance
  • functionality
  • vegetation
  • environmental conservation
  • infrastructure improvements
  • community involvement
  • diverse groups
  • outdoor activities
  • environmental stewardship
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