The bar chart represents the number of travellers using three main airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000.

The bar chart represents the number of travellers using three main airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000.
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The bar chart represents the number of
travellers
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using
three
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the three
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main
airports
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in New York City from 1995 to 2000. In the supplied chart it is clearly observed that the John F. Kennedy
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airport
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used to be the most popular
airport
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in
the
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New York which lost its commonness throughout the 1990s,
however
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, the other ones held their position steadily. The Newark
airport
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accounted
the
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for the
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least amount of people travelling, to be more precise less than 10
million
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in 1995
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compared
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with
the
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42
million
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in 2000. As shown in the illustration by the time of 2000s
airports
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became more common,
thus
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there was a significant upsurge in the proportion of airplane
travellers
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and all three of
provided
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the provided
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airports
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displayed a high range of passengers going up from 40
million
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and reaching a peak with final 70
million
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in the LaGuardia
airport
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. In 1996 and 1997
airports
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like John F. Kennedy and LaGuardia had more than 30
million
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travellers
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using their airplanes but
this
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proportion in the Newark
airport
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raised sharply from 20 to 40
million
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.
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, in 1998 and 1999 the LaGuardia
airport
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held the position of the most well-known
airport
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in NY collecting more than 45
million
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travellers
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.
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