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The chart below gives information about Soutland`s main exports in 2002, 2023 and future profection for 2025

The chart below gives information about Soutland`s main exports in 2002, 2023 and future profection for 2025
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The following chart delineates the statistics about export trends of 3 products in Southland in 2000,
2023
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and 2023
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 and future estimations for the year
of
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2025. The units are measured in
billion
 pounds.
Overall
,
while
 the exportation of international tourism soars, meat products undergo
the
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a
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 reduction over 25 years. Delving into the details, Tourism contributed
the
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 economy the most during the year
of
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2000, representing 8
billion
,
in contrast
 to
the
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dairy and meat which stood at 7
billion
 and 6
billion
, respectively. Tourism exports, showing a rising trend are expected to hit the high of 10
billion
 in 2025, reflecting an increase of 2
billion
 from the 2000 figures. The dairy industry
which
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was the second-largest export in 2000 and it
has
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witnessed 10
billion
 which
were
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 the highest figure in the current year. Projections for 2025 suggest that dairy exports will hover between 9 and 10
billion
.
In contrast
, the exportation
in
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 meat outputs began at 6
billion
 in 2000 and with
decreasing
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a decreasing
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 tendency has become just under 6
billion
 in 2023 and it is assumed that the number will plunge to 5
billion
 in 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • overview
  • comparison
  • projection
  • main
  • 2002
  • 2023
  • 2025
  • factors
  • influence
  • changes
  • possible
  • implications
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