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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working proplr no get enough exercise? And what can be done about this problems?

#people #exercise #time #health #proplr #get
it is certainly true that everyone's busy in their life nowadays.Because
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want
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 to earn money to fulfill their desires.So, individuals do not get time for
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workout
then
 face many diseases.
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 is more essential than
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 .Because
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a sound mind lives in a good body.I will discuss the cons
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 in upcoming paragraphs. To start with,in the present time,folk have to spend a lot of time in
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front of
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.Which has adverse effects on their energy.
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, it not only affects the eyes
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but
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also
 leads to other problems like obesity.Exercise is important for everyone.In view of the fact that crowd get fresh air during task and muscles
also
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 properly.
For instance
,In 2009, a survey showed that 80% of people were suffering from back problems.Because a
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community
 who
were
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 working in the office.they sit on chairs the whole day and
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 prefer to do any physical
activity
.
Moreover
, Workers have high levels of stress related to effort.so,after finishing their
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thanthey
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than they
that they
 do not have enough energy to pursue any action and want to rest rather than
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.
Apart from
this
,some human do not know
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 of the act in their life
then
 avoid doing any outdoor
activity
.
On the other hand
,there are some solutions to these problems.Employers should fix the working hours and encourage to employees towards physical activities
as well as
 provide gym facilities in the working area.
Furthermore
,the media should promote physical
activity
 and programs.The government should aware society of
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its strength
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 by organising a seminar.
In addition
 ,the authority should provide gym amenities at affordable
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prices
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.
To sum up
,
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 should aware of their energy and the government should give a reward to folk who are participate in physical
activity
.so,society will follow them as role models.which leads to
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youngster
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younger
towrads
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towards
activity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • work pressure
  • awareness
  • prioritize
  • commitments
  • affordable
  • convenient
  • peer support
  • technology
  • motivation
  • workplace initiatives
  • flexible working hours
  • educating
  • community programs
  • media campaigns
  • incentives
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