You are the charge nurse on the mental health ward where Mr Ming will be discharged from and need to write a nursing referral letter to the local community mental health team.

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I am writing to refer Mr Ming who has major depression and requires your continued monitoring and care. Now he is set to be discharged today. He was admitted to our care on 5 April 2011 following deliberate
self poisoning
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self-poisoning
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. He has received CBT counselling by
chinese
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a
speaking
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Chinese-speaking
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transcultural mental health worker
as well as
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his mother educated regarding the importance of antidepressant medications. During hospitalization, he has increased
insomia
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insomnia
and low mood for which 30 mg
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of Mirtazipine
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Mirtazipine
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Mirtazapine
was administered
of
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his usual
medication
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. Currently, he made a good response to CBT. Mr Ming is a labourer and
lived
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with his mother. He has
depressed
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been depressed
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and
umemployed
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unemployed
since his wife got separated
due to
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her affair. His mother doesn't like him taking psychiatric
medication
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due to
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her beliefs
on
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in
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herbal medicines. he has a history of hospitalization for major depression following DSP. I would highly
appreciated
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it
,
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if you could manage him through
community
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mental health team. Kindly
made
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an arrangement for CBT counselling by
chinese speaking
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a Chinese-speaking
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clinician or interpreter service. Encourage him to do physical exercise and job hunting. Kindly observe his response to antidepressant
medication
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and monitor any side effects.
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to that, avoid prescribing Benzo
medication
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as he uses these
to
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for
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DSP. Yours faithfully Nurse
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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