Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The high prevalence of advertising has been debated vigorously these days. Advertisements are becoming widespread in daily life and
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communıtıes, highlighting the manipulative abilities of advertisement. The world has been changing and consuming is getting more popular compared to the past.
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advertising,
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have been influenced and they are willing to buy more whether bought items are necessary or not.
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, beauty companies try to create a beauty standard and make
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if they do not use some pharmautics, they will not catch up with the 'proper' beauty standard.
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being more prone to commends which come from a third person or outworld.
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, individuals face more pressure and
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, advertising usually does not take
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’s consent, unfortunately, individuals
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irrelevant advertisements from billboards which are widespread around the city or when they have been surfing the internet. Without consent, our cognitive skills are captured by these commercial things and it fosters a buying desire. To illustrate, every October new iPhones are announced by Apple and the company is pumping the buying idea using excessive advertisement style, and
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many
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,
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might face financial obscure and feel emotionally fragile. All in all, advertising should be viewed as a weapon to hunt
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’s minds. Regulations and framed rules should be applied to determine its boundary.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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