The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
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different
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stages involved in generating
sugar
.
Overall
, the process of generating
sugar
consists of seven stages. Notably, all the stages
carried
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are carried
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out by machines. Except from the second stage, that can
also
be done by
human
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. To commence with, the basic material for producing
sugar
is
sugar
cane, which takes about one year to 18 months to grow
up
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. After that, the mature harvests are reaped by machines or human contribution.
Next,
the reaped plants are transformed
to
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the
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factory. There, they are smashed by machine, in order to acquire glucose cane juice. As it may have some impurities, it is crossed through a limestone filter and poured into a giant evaporator. By heating the juice in that container it starts to boil until
,
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it thickens and
converted
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is converted
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to syrup. At the sixth stage,
sugar
crystals are separated from syrup in
Centrifuge
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the Centrifuge
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machine, but as they are warm and humid they should be dried and cooled which
resulting
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results in
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consumable
sugar
.
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