The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.
The given graphs show the
traveling
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travelling
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reasons and the issues
while
traveling
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public
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in public
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in the United States of America in 2009.
Overall
,
according to
the graphs, the main
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apply
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reason was
the
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work and the main
issue
of
traveling
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was
price
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the price
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of
travel
in 2009.
In the
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first bar graph shows
travel
reasons, the highest number of people
travel
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for work
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purse
, it accounted
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the half of total
traveler
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(49%)
while
the lowest number of people
travel
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for
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to
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visit friends or relatives, which was 6%.
However
, 19% of people
travel
for personal reasons and 16%
travel
for shopping
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purse
for
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the US.
This
pie chart indicates six
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issues in the US, as per
this
chart the main
issue
was
price
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the price
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of
travel
, 36% of travellers
higlighed
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highlighted
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this
as
issue
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an issue
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of
tralling
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travelling
. Safety concerns and aggressive drivers showed as
issue
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an issue
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of quite similar
persentage
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percentage
of traveller, 19% and 17% respectively.
On the other hand
, access to public transport and space for pedestrians indicated as problems were less than 10%.
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