The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

#show #travel

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traveling

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reasons and the issues

while

traveling

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travelling

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public

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in public

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in the United States of America in 2009.

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according to

the graphs, the main

traveling

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apply

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reason was

the

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work and the main

issue

traveling

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was

price

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the price

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travel

in 2009.

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first bar graph shows

travel

reasons, the highest number of people

travel

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for work

popurse

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, it accounted

almost

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the half of total

traveler

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(49%)

while

the lowest number of people

travel

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for

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visit friends or relatives, which was 6%.

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, 19% of people

travel

for personal reasons and 16%

travel

for shopping

popurse

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purse

for

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the US.

This

pie chart indicates six

traveling

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issues in the US, as per

this

chart the main

issue

was

price

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the price

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travel

, 36% of travellers

higlighed

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highlighted

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this

issue

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an issue

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tralling

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travelling

. Safety concerns and aggressive drivers showed as

issue

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an issue

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of quite similar

persentage

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percentage

of traveller, 19% and 17% respectively.

On the other hand

, access to public transport and space for pedestrians indicated as problems were less than 10%.

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4 paragraphs

170 words

6.50

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Clear and correct grammar

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