the chart below shows global sale of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The bar chart illustrates
difference
Add an article
the difference
of
global Change preposition
in
sale
of the top five mobile phone companies between 2009 and 2013. Fix the agreement mistake
sales
Units
sold measured
in millions.
Add a missing verb
are measured
Overall
, Samsung
, Apple and ZTE companies show increase
in Add an article
an increase
number
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the number
units
sold in the entire time Change preposition
of units
period
. However
, Nokia and LG brands show decrease
in the same time Add an article
a decrease
period
.
Samsung
company shows a gradually
increase from the start of the Change the adverb
gradual
period
to 2013, and also
shows the highest increase of five different brands. It started with roughly 230 and ended with more than 300 units
sold. Similarly
, Apple and ZTE companies demonstrates
a rise, but not Change the verb form
demonstrate
so
Correct word choice
as
sighnificant
as Correct your spelling
significant
samsung
does. Apple started from the lowest figure in 2009 and reached Change the capitalization
Samsung
the
third place Correct article usage
apply
at the end
of the period
and comprised the
150 Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
units
sold. Regarding the ZTE, chart
shows the least change of Add an article
the chart
units
in comparison with other brands from 2009 to 2013.
With regard to Nokia, data shows that company
was the Correct article usage
the company
first,
in terms of products sold, in 2009 and 2011, but was replaced after a drammatic
fall from more than 400 to 220, by Correct your spelling
dramatic
Samsung
. The LG company gradually falled
from 2009 and 2013, Correct your spelling
fell
started
with more than 100 and Wrong verb form
starting
ended
up with roughly 70.Wrong verb form
ending
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