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The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?

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Distinct economic values have led to a huge distance between societies. As these days the difference between these two groups is getting more significant, the reason behind
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 phenomenon is getting quite debatable worldwide. In
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 with, the first and foremost cause of the existence of the
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 between rich and poor lies in the fact that in countries dealing with
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 issue, some corruption is leading to unequal distribution of the state's wealth among
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. In
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 countries, properties are being unfairly addressed to families of higher social status rather than communities in favour.
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, research conducted on African economic scandals has indicated that opulent families are receiving subsidies ten times more than poor ones. As a resolution, authorities can bridge
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 by imposing taxes on
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 with higher incomes
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 preventing tax evasion and dedicating the money to destitute societies. The more the government offers help to poverty-stricken
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, the more job opportunities and education will appear, prior to a lower rate of immigration from poor to wealthy states which stands as the second reason for
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. Economists working on the reason behind economic inflation in Iran, have come to the conclusion that the circle of poverty can not be broken as individuals living in economically backward regions have few occupational and educational opportunities to rely on for improving quality of life.
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 would immigrate to more developed societies in order to reach their desired goals.
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, a measure taken by several countries has shown tangible results in eradicating recession which is offering full-fund studying positions and adopting policies focused on small businesses.
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 the lack of fair distribution and contribution from the government have led to a huge
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 between individuals from divergent financial positions, a closer monitoring of rich families' tax payments and an increased rate of contribution to poor
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 might act as a successful resolution

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