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Some people believe that the expansion of tourism is ruining the culture of a country, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The benefits of
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 renowned all over the world. There are conflicting
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 on the influence of
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in
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 the cultures of each
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; some community thinks that
tourism
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 is disrupting the
culture
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 of a
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;
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, some think of it as the only way to preserve the
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.
This
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 and will provide my personal opinion towards the influences of
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 a community's
cultures
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culture
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First,
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tourist can influence a
country
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's way of thinking, which can distort their personal beliefs.
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, if a local
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 a different
behavior
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 from the travellers, they tend to adjust their actions to match the visitor's desires.
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, in some circumstances, the community need to adjust their trademarks, so that they can encourage more people to visit them.
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, citizens may become
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 to the
tourism
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 strategies that they tend to forget about their own identity.
On the other hand
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,
tourism
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 can be the only option to maintain a
country
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's tradition. If visitors are interested in learning a specific
country
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's history, it will be essential for authorities to keep the local cultures.
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, many people travel to Japan, as they
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 to wear
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traditional Japanese costumes.
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, travellers are impressed by
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 of the Japanese traditions.
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, the government believe that it is vital to maintain a
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's tradition and history.
To conclude
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, there are opposing
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 on
effects
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 of
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's popularity
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 a
country
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's
culture
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. In my opinion, both
views
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 are beneficial to maintain the
culture
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 of a
country
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. Both
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 have strong points in each
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