You need to organize an office event in a community center. Write a letter to the center.

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Dear sir, My name is Ahmed Ali who is the manager of Rahber company. I would like to tell you about our facility

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to organize

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organize

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organising

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the

event

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for

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the

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28th anivascery beside that,

thay

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they

wants

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want

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to arrange the

event

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in the community

center

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centre

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. The purpose of

organize

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organising

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the

event

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is beacouse

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beacouse

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because

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this

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apply

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the office has

28th

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its 28th

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anniversary

that

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why

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arrange

the

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some entertainment and

refreshing

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the staff. I would like to tell you about the

event

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organizing ideas please

noted

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firstly

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provide the card for reservations booking date is 22 to till 30th November. Make the fancy invitation care and arrange the buffet

systm

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system

for

resfereshment

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refreshment

refreshments

arange

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arrange

some music and

event

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organizing lighting

catring

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catering

caring

for

the

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our facility. You should arrange the stage for our

honerable

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honourable

members. I request you arrange

the

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apply

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assistance for housekeeping and Management who

seems

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the whole

event

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management.

Beacouse

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Because

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event

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all facility will busy so that's why

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am requesting you for

arrange

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someone assistance. I hope you hear shortly. Yours faithfully, Xyz

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

167 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Community center
Office event
Organize
Facilities
Availability
Reserve
Date
Time
Duration
Number of participants
Budget
Catering
Equipment
Setup
Decorations
Entertainment
Parking
Assistance
Collaboration
Appreciate
Gratitude

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