In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative devlopment? write at least 250 words.

Nowdays
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Nowadays
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, advertising
becomes
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has become
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major
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a major
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role
to grow
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business.
Due to
high competition companies introduce new
changes
day by day, and
promoting
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promote
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products. I endorse the statement to a large extent. I have some solid grounds to define the positive and negative impacts which I would like to explicate at length in the paragraph to come. The
brands
promote products because of daily sales
presure
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pressure
, high competition, to increase prices and to create
reputation
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a reputation
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. Brand value creation is one of the high
concern
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concerns
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of these branding
advertisememts
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advertisements
, they do not value the negative and positive results of the
product
.
To begin
with, the products are introducing new
changes
based on the customer's feedback. Based on
this
, the companies
has
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have
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to give advertisement to make people aware of
this
.
For example
, the 'Whisper' is making
changes
in pads which women use during mensuration by taking
the
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apply
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survey's
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surveys
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based on
comfirt
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comfort
.
Consequently
, many
brands
share false advertisements by changing
colors
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the colors
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of the
product
. They lie that the
product
has
changes
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changed
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in quality just by changing the packing design and size. Many people believe just by watching the packing and
purchase
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purchasing
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it.
Hence
, for
longer
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the longer
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term
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term,
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it becomes
as
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apply
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a negative result. In a nutshell,
the
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apply
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brands
should do promotions only when it is worthwhile
otherwise
, they should not be allowed to do
wrong
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the wrong
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advertisement
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advertisements
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about the
product
. To check these activities the government should keep on check on the activities of these
brands
.
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