The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The line graph gives information about the results of research on
the
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apply
tea
and Use synonyms
coffee
consumption in 5 Australian Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
Overall
, most residents living in Australia preferred to go to stalls Linking Words
for buying
fresh Change preposition
to buy
coffee
or Use synonyms
tea
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among
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in
all
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apply
cities
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Linking Words
whereas
buying fresh Correct word choice
where
coffee
was a slight demand.
Regarding categories, Use synonyms
according to
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survey
drinking Correct article usage
a survey
habit
in out contributed dramatically Fix the agreement mistake
habits
growth
in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart middle between 60 and 65 % in the sale of Change preposition
to growth
last
4 weeks. Linking Words
In contrast
, these Linking Words
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cities
citizens did not pay attention to Change noun form
city's
cities'
stop
on the way to get fresh Wrong verb form
stopping
coffee
with 30-40 % ,Use synonyms
it
was a fourth of Correct pronoun usage
which
total
drinking percentage. In these urban Correct article usage
the total
areas
instant Add a comma
areas,
coffee
in the supermarkets was average demand in Use synonyms
this
period.
In terms of Brisbane and Adeline , drinking and buying habits became less demanding than other Linking Words
cities
in Australia. Use synonyms
Index
degree of drinking and buying Correct article usage
The index
coffee
and Use synonyms
tea
was the same mentioned Use synonyms
cities
above. Use synonyms
In addition
, Brisbane and Adelaide considered that drinking Linking Words
coffee
and Use synonyms
tea
out was suitable .Use synonyms
In contrast
, their demand on buying fresh Linking Words
coffee
was considerably Use synonyms
little
during Correct word choice
low
Linking Words
last
4 weeks.Correct article usage
the last
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