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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The line graph gives information about the results of research on
the
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apply
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tea
 and
coffee
 consumption in 5 Australian
cities
.
Overall
, most residents living in Australia preferred to go to stalls
for buying
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to buy
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 fresh
coffee
 or
tea
among
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in
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all
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apply
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cities
whereas
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where
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 buying fresh
coffee
 was a slight demand. Regarding categories,
according to
survey
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a survey
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 drinking
habit
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habits
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 in out contributed dramatically
growth
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to growth
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 in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart middle between 60 and 65 % in the sale of
last
 4 weeks.
In contrast
, these
cities
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city's
cities'
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 citizens did not pay attention to
stop
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stopping
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 on the way to get fresh
coffee
 with 30-40 % ,
it
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which
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 was a fourth of
total
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the total
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 drinking percentage. In these urban
areas
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areas,
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 instant
coffee
 in the supermarkets was average demand in
this
 period. In terms of Brisbane and Adeline , drinking and buying habits became less demanding than other
cities
 in Australia.
Index
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The index
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 degree of drinking and buying
coffee
 and
tea
 was the same mentioned
cities
 above.
In addition
, Brisbane and Adelaide considered that drinking
coffee
 and
tea
 out was suitable .
In contrast
, their demand on buying fresh
coffee
 was considerably
little
Correct word choice
low
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 during
last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, cities with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • purchase locations
  • frequency
  • influencing factors
  • artisanal
  • preferences
  • survey data
  • market trends
  • specialty stores
  • drinking habits
  • urban consumption
  • morning rush
  • afternoon break
  • brand loyalty
  • quality-conscious
  • convenience-driven
  • organic products
  • habitual drinkers
  • occasional consumers
  • taste preferences
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