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More and more wild animals are on the verge extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Animals
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 are an integral part of
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the enviromental
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enviromental
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environment
.Nowadays ,the majority number of wild
animals
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 are on the way
of
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to
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 extinction, and some of them are on the endangered list.
This
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 essay will discuss the main problems associated with
disappearance
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the disappearance
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animals
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of animals
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 and propose some possible solutions to avoid them. One of the main causes of the problem is illegal hunting.Many
people
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 hunt
animals
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 for their skin and some hound as a hobby.
As a result
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, relatives of wild
animals
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 will disappear.For.example,many tigers are killed by
people
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 for weaving
coat
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coats
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.The solution is that the government must pass
the
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a
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 law in the parliament against illegal hunting.In
this
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 way,we
maybe
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may
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 save endangered
animals
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 . Another reason for the extinction of many creatures is deforestation which is done to facilitate the expansion and development of urban areas.
Due to
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 the fact that
people
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is
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are
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 cutting down the forests .Wild
animals
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lode
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lose
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 their natural habitat and
animals
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 put their
life's
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lives
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 at risk.
That is
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 to
say
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say,
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 homeless
animals
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 go
to
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apply
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among
people
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for finding
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to find
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 cats.That's
way
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why
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people
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 end the lives of
animals
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 to avoid lunge.To tackle
this
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 problem,
government
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the government
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 must ban
the
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apply
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deforestation and
people
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 need
use
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for
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it for
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growth
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the growth
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 of cities.
Such
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 as
inor
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minor
.Inor is strong ,in preference to wood. In conclusion,
illegally
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illegal
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 hunting and the removal of all trees from
a large areas
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large areas
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 have become serious problems. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with the government.

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