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In many countries, people do not recycle waster materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Recycling materials are an important issue that each country must have critical rules for them. Unfortunately, some
countries
 do not pay attention to it. Because of the living on The earth, developed and rich families have to assist them. Recently, most
countries
 have connected to each other and caused globalization,
as a result
, they affect
another area
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 more and more. So, attention to waste materials is vital to lifelong on our planet. One reason that they do not recycle paper is because of their knowledge about
consequences
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 of overusing it,
such
 as deforestation.
As a result
, at one step, developed
countries
 should be aware of developing and under-developing
countries
 to act.
Secondly
, some
countries
 do not have suitable machinery to recycle that material and
also
 do not have enough budget to cost
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their equipment,
as a result
, it’s the wealthy
countries
 to support poor areas to approach modern equipment to avoid throwing it. In total, every country must observe others to use natural resources correctly because all people live on the earth and our shelter needs to be saved from the mass of wasted materials.
Thirdly
, some
countries
 do not teach their citizen to separate their trash from their home, so it causes
any
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problems with recycling them. For
this
, governments have to encourage people to separate trashes with some donated goods and other encouraging ways,
such
 as reducing their bill. In conclusion, our modern world needs to save from trash and all
countries
 must help each other to prevent to loss of our green planet. With export their knowledge and up-to-date equipment to under-developing
countries
.
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