In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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life span than ever before.
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thinks that there are
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has more elderly
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than disadvantages . The essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of having an ageing
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outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, there are different aspects regarding the benefits of the older
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. The major advantage is , they have millions of life experiences and we can get
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difficulties and we cannot
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after their retirement.
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society
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because they provide their service
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volunteer
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, some retired persons have joined
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to help poor individuals and
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companies like to get
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because they are just
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a package
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of experiences and knowledge.
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regarding an ageing
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and how important
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the world.
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think that an ageing
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creates some problems.
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my view, there is one major
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ageing persons cannot do their
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by themselves. At that time,
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the government
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have
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are responsibility regarding them and their health.
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, some ageing parents do not have their children to
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them and
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situations
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government
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a responsibility regarding them.
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have provided their services to the government before retirement or their
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healthier
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major disadvantage
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older
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are living longer than ever now in the world. Some
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think
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ageing
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are make
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lot
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of problems and some
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think that they are very important.
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,
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according to
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my view, there are many
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of having an ageing
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that outweigh
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outweigh
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outweighs
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the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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