In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?
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the
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of
countries, citizens have Change preposition
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long
life span than ever before. Correct word choice
a longer
The
part of Correct determiner usage
One
society
says that an ageing population
makes
difficulties for Verb problem
creates
gevernments
and the other part of Correct your spelling
governments
the
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apply
society
thinks that there are advantages
if society
has more elderly people
. According to
my view, there are Change preposition
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advantages
than disadvantages . The essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of having an ageing Correct quantifier usage
more advantages
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person
the
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apply
society
and to what extend
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extent
do
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advantages
outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are different aspects regarding the benefits of the older people
in the society
. The major advantage is , they have millions of life experiences and we can get advices
when we Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
faced
difficulties and we cannot Wrong verb form
face
choose
Verb problem
make
right
decisions. The second Correct article usage
the right
pros
is, Fix the agreement mistake
pro
they
Correct word choice
that they
are prefer
to work Change the verb form
prefer
moreover
after their retirement. Rephrase
apply
Then
, it is very important to the
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apply
society
because they provide their service volunteery
. Correct your spelling
volunteer
volunteers
For example
, some retired persons have joined to
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apply
NGO's
to help poor individuals and Change noun form
NGOs
the
companies like to get Correct article usage
apply
the
older Correct article usage
apply
people
's service
because they are just Fix the agreement mistake
services
package
of experiences and knowledge. Correct article usage
a package
Hence
, there are several advantages
regarding an ageing population
and how important them
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they
to
the world.
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are to
On the other hand
, some people
think that an ageing population
creates some problems. As
my view, there is one major Change preposition
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cons
, It is, Change to a singular noun
con
some
ageing persons cannot do their Correct word choice
that some
works
by themselves. At that time, Fix the agreement mistake
work
government
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the government
have
are responsibility regarding them and their health. Wrong verb form
had
For instance
, some ageing parents do not have their children to look-after
them and Correct your spelling
look after
at
that Change preposition
in
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situation
situations
government Add a comma
situations,
have
a responsibility regarding them. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Due to
that people
have provided their services to the government before retirement or their healtheir
period. Correct your spelling
healthier
Therefore
, this
is the
major disadvantage Change the article
a
regading
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regarding
the
older Correct article usage
apply
people
.
To conclude
, people
are living longer than ever now in the world. Some people
think an
ageing Correct article usage
apply
people
are make
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are making
lot
of problems and some Change the article
a lot
people
think that they are very important. However
, according to
my view, there are many Change preposition
in
advantages
of having an ageing population
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that outweigh
outweigh
the disadvantages.Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
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