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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the annual
incomes
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 of
households
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 in the US in
years
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the years
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 2007, 2011 and 2015. Annual
incomes
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categorized
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are categorized
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in
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into
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 5 different
section
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sections
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. Most
of
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apply
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income groups remained steady throughout the period except
number
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a number
the number
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 of lower groups and people with higher income showed
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a sharply
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sharply
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 increase. In 2007, nearly 30
million
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of
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apply
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households
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have
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had
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 more than $100,000 income and
this
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 decreased to around 25
million
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of
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apply
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people before
showed
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showing
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increase
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an increase
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 in 2015 to more than 32
million
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of
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apply
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people.
This
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 was the biggest
rose
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 in the all period.
Similarly
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,
households
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 who have total earnings
less
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of less
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 than $25.000 saw
same
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the same
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 pattern, it started with exactly 25
million
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 of family in 2007,
than
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then
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 reached
to
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apply
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under 30
million
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 after 5 years and lost around 2
million
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households
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 in 2015. Nearly 65
million
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 houses have
incomes
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 between $25.000 to 100.000$ and
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this
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these
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 numbers remain almost
same
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the same
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 in three years.
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, houseös with
incomes
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 between $25.000 - $49.000
expreinced
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experienced
 more than 3
million
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 increases in
termm
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terms
term
 of
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households
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household
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 numbers from 2007 to 2011.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incomes, households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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