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In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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In some
nationalities
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 a high percentage of
criminal
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criminals
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 are misdeeds by
young
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the young
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 generation.
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 is mainly because of the lack of
education
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 and
negative
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the negative
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environment
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. There are a number of solutions which should be implemented
for decreasing
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this
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 rate.
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, the reason for
high
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a high
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 level of crime among teenagers is
lack
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a lack
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 of
education
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.
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, good
education
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 could give
to
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apply
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children responsibility and realizing what might happen when one of them
will do
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which
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contrary
of
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to
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law
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the law
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.
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, people cannot ignore that
bad
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a bad
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environment
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 has a huge
influencing
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to
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new
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a new
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 generation which cannot think critically. Statistic shows that teenagers
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environment
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have
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has
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 been destructive,
they
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apply
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usually do offence
easier
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more easily
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 than others.
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, these factors might lead to difficulties for society. There are two effective solutions to the problem of
teenagers’
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teenage’
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 crime. One way to tackle
this
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 is to ensure that providing quality
education
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 for all children which do not depend
of
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 place.
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, it is
regular
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 situation when in small cities or villages quality of
education
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 is low. Another method is evenly providing
well
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a well
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environment
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 which includes
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a high-level
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high-level
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high level
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 of infrastructure and economic degree, throughout the country. It definitely can change peoples` values and
develops
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develop
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 a competitive and healthy
environment
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 for people who live there. In conclusion, providing
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a high-level
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high-level
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high level
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 of basic
education
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 and
also
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 improving
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environment
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the environment
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such
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 as infrastructure and economic
degree
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degrees
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 are effective in dealing with
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 issue. If governments implemented these solutions, definitely, the rate of
felony
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felonies
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 among teenagers would be decreased.
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language
Ensure you use a range of vocabulary and expressions to avoid repetition and enhance the richness of your essay.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and details to fully support your points, such as citing studies or historical instances.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
task achievement
You identified key reasons for teenage crime and proposed practical solutions.

Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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