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The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.

The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
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The table illustrates statistics concerning the proportion of children exposed to various issues during their education in two primary schools in two distinct years.
Overall
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, a decrease in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 with educational issues over time notwithstanding,
students
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 experienced more problems in
School
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 A rather than in
School
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B
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.   In 2005, a higher
percentage
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 of
students
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 struggled with different problems in
school
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 A, where concentration in lessons and following instructions served as the main problem areas, representing 40 per
cent
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 and 42 per
cent
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 respectively.
On the other hand
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, verbal expression of ideas (with 14 per
cent
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) and concentration in lessons (with 15 per
cent
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) in
school
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B
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 played a more vital role in challenging children during schooling.   In 2015,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
students
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 in almost all problem fields remained approximately unchanged in
School
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B
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, the proportion in
School
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 A fell dramatically, especially in the primary problem areas.
This
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 means that the
percentage
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 of
students
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 in
school
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 A having problems with concentrating in lessons and following instructions, with Level  falling by half to 18 per
cent
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 in 2015.
However
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, in
school
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B
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, two primary reasons for educational setbacks did not alter, remaining at 15 per
cent
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, school, b, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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