In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is argued that in the future, newspapers and
books
will be replaced by free online samples. I completely agree that
this
prediction will come true in the near future for several reasons. There are a variety of reasons that there will be no
paper
-based news or
books
in a few years from now.
Firstly
,
people
have to pay money to buy
books
or magazines.
Also
, the price of a sheet of
paper
is growing significantly, so buying
paper
books
will not be affordable for society.
Secondly
,
paper
is made of trees, so with
this
growth in the number of book consumers, there will be no trees to produce enough
paper
and
this
unlimited action will harm nature.
Finally
,
books
not only occupy a noticeable space but are
also
heavy to carry, so it is hard for
people
who are interested in reading to have their
books
with them everywhere. I believe that
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online
books
and newspapers are the cheapest and fastest way for
people
who are interested in reading and become aware of the news.
Furthermore
, online access to reading sources can protect the vibrant nature and the wildlife from human footprints by reducing the cutting of trees.
Moreover
,
People
can reach the hottest news and
also
the newest
books
on their smartphones wherever they are and without any time consuming and getting stuck in traffic to buy the
paper
version.
For
instance
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people
can read online
books
whenever they are
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the way to their work or school or even listen to online audio
books
instead
of reading. In conclusion, my view is that in the future, there will be no need to buy
paper
books
or newspapers and
people
will rather access online ones for many reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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