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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is argued that in the future, newspapers and
books
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 will be replaced by free online samples. I completely agree that
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 prediction will come true in the near future for several reasons. There are a variety of reasons that there will be no
paper
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-based news or
books
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 in a few years from now.
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,
people
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 have to pay money to buy
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 or magazines.
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, the price of a sheet of
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 is growing significantly, so buying
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books
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 will not be affordable for society.
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,
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 is made of trees, so with
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 growth in the number of book consumers, there will be no trees to produce enough
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 and
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 unlimited action will harm nature.
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,
books
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 not only occupy a noticeable space but are
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 heavy to carry, so it is hard for
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 who are interested in reading to have their
books
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 with them everywhere. I believe that
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 online
books
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 and newspapers are the cheapest and fastest way for
people
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 who are interested in reading and become aware of the news.
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, online access to reading sources can protect the vibrant nature and the wildlife from human footprints by reducing the cutting of trees.
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,
People
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 can reach the hottest news and
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 the newest
books
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 on their smartphones wherever they are and without any time consuming and getting stuck in traffic to buy the
paper
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 version.
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people
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 can read online
books
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 whenever they are
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 the way to their work or school or even listen to online audio
books
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instead
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 of reading. In conclusion, my view is that in the future, there will be no need to buy
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books
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 or newspapers and
people
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 will rather access online ones for many reasons.

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coherence cohesion
Consider organising your thoughts more succinctly to improve readability. While your arguments are comprehensive, they sometimes lack clear delineation, which can make your essay seem less structured.
task achievement
Pay attention to the flow of your argument. Make sure one point logically leads to the next to provide a more coherent argument. This can make your essay more persuasive and easier to follow.
lexical resource
In some parts of your essay, you could further improve your lexical resource score by varying your choice of words and phrases. This could help make your responses more engaging and demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.
grammatical range and accuracy
You've displayed a good control over sentence structure and variety. However, do ensure to review your work for minor grammatical errors and punctuation misuse to improve on your score for grammatical range and accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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