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The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The Graph shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph displays the dislodgement of carbon dioxide per individual from 1967 to 2007 in
United
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 Kingdom,
Sweden
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,Italy and Portugal.The unit is measured in metric tonnes.
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, it is evident that there was an upward trend in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
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while
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 a downward slope was observed in the remaining countries over the years.
To begin
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 with, In 1967,the figures stood at 11 in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
was
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 the highest when compared to other places and Portugal was the least at 1 hitting the bottom of the graph.
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, There was a
Similar
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 pattern between
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the United
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 Kingdom and
Sweden
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 as they witnessed a dramatic fall to 9 and 5 respectively by 2007.
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, in
portugal
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 and Italy,their initial rate rose rapidly from 5 and 1 respectively over the years,
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, there was an intersection in the value of Italy and
Sweden
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 at 7 from 1987 to 1997,
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 that of
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UK
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 and Portugal clashed at 5 being the least
at the end
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 of the period.
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, in 2007, The highest emissions were in Italy and
Sweden
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, with
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UK
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the UK
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 being the highest
amongst
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 the four nations.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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