The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. 

Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The given graph illustrates the number of tourists visited in five different countries
in
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various
time
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.
Overall
,the most visited country in 2010 is the USA and France.
While
,
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the
least
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last
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one
is
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Brazil.
Whereas
,in1995 USA has been the most visited country and Egypt was the lowest.
Moreover
,
United
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States
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70 arrivals in 1995
then
it surged to 90 in 2010.
Along with
it, France remained 30 in 1995 and hiked to 90 in the year 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international tourist arrivals
  • insight
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuation
  • statistic
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • surge
  • data point
  • comparative
  • quantitative analysis
  • economic factor
  • political stability
  • tourism sector
  • global event
  • destination popularity
  • benchmark
  • year-on-year change
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