Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plant and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Environmental
issues
are emerging. A part of society argues that these issues
are caused by the decreasing of particular species of plants
and animals, while
the other believe
that there Change the verb form
believes
more
important environmental problems that Add a missing verb
are more
does
more harm.
Significant decreases Change the verb form
do
of
certain species will cause food chain instability and difficulty in managing disasters. An example Change preposition
in
for
the former is that, when there is a downfall of insects within an ecosystem, it will affect the food production of Change preposition
of
plants
since their reproduction process are
helped by insects. Change the verb form
is
As a result
, there will be insufficient
food supply for the Add an article
an insufficient
herbivore
Fix the agreement mistake
herbivores
and
eventually Correct word choice
apply
affect
the Wrong verb form
affecting
carnivore
. Fix the agreement mistake
carnivores
Additionally
, regarding the latter, several plants
often contribute through their roots in maintaining the structure of land,
and prevent us from experiencing landslides.
Despite the problem caused by decreasing habitat diversity, environmental Remove the comma
apply
issues
such
as industrial waste and pollution also
become major contributors. For instance
, in Indonesia, the owner of textile industries are often disobeying the rules of fabric-coloring
sewage standards. Change the spelling
fabric-colouring
As a result
, the land soils are contaminated by heavy metals that were used as coloring
substances. Change the spelling
colouring
Furthermore
, the pollution issues
are often caused by coal-based power plant
. Fix the agreement mistake
plants
For example
, in Indonesia, approximately 80% of its electricity are
supplied by coal-based energy, which means there are a massive number of ashes that are released Correct subject-verb agreement
is
to
the air.
Change preposition
into
To sum up
, I agree that the other source of the environmental problems such
as industries and power plants
are the major contributors since they engage in a big production scale.Submitted by manapapuja2 on
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