Question: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plant and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental
issues
are emerging. A part of society argues that these
issues
are caused by the decreasing of particular species of
plants
and animals,
while
the other
believe
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that there
more
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are more
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important environmental problems that
does
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more harm. Significant decreases
of
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certain species will cause food chain instability and difficulty in managing disasters. An example
for
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the former is that, when there is a downfall of insects within an ecosystem, it will affect the food production of
plants
since their reproduction process
are
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helped by insects.
As a result
, there will be
insufficient
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food supply for the
herbivore
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and
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eventually
affect
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the
carnivore
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.
Additionally
, regarding the latter, several
plants
often contribute through their roots in maintaining the structure of land
,
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and prevent us from experiencing landslides. Despite the problem caused by decreasing habitat diversity, environmental
issues
such
as industrial waste and pollution
also
become major contributors.
For instance
, in Indonesia, the owner of textile industries are often disobeying the rules of
fabric-coloring
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sewage standards.
As a result
, the land soils are contaminated by heavy metals that were used as
coloring
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substances.
Furthermore
, the pollution
issues
are often caused by coal-based power
plant
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plants
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.
For example
, in Indonesia, approximately 80% of its electricity
are
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supplied by coal-based energy, which means there are a massive number of ashes that are released
to
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the air.
To sum up
, I agree that the other source of the environmental problems
such
as industries and power
plants
are the major contributors since they engage in a big production scale.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystems
  • Extinction
  • Climate change
  • Global warming
  • Habitat loss
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Pollutants
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Renewable resources
  • Conservation
  • Deforestation
  • Endangered species
  • Ecological balance
  • Overpopulation
  • Biodegradable
  • Recycling
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Eco-friendly
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