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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the points of three different teams
such
 as
the
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team
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teams
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 A ,
B
 and C during the four years.
Overall
, Based on
this
 graph
Team
B
 Performed better than
other
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the other
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 teams and
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also
 the
team
 got
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the hightest
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hightest
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highest
point
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points
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over the four
season
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seasons
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.
Highest
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The highest
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point
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was
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recored
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recorded
record
 in 2002, at nearly 82 which
made
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was made
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 by
team
B
 .
Moreover
 roughly
lowest
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the lowest
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point
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was achived
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achived
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achieved
 by
team
 A exit
the
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2004 and
on
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in
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 that
year's
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year
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 got the
mininum
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minimum
point
 by
team
 C .
when
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compared
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comparing
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 all four
season
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seasons
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,
team
 A got the lowest
point
 in 2002 , at around 5
point
 . First of all , In 2002
team
 A won with
big
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a big
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 gap
betweet
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between
other
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 two teams which
was
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were
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approximately 75pt .
however
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comparaly
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comparably
big
compatetion
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competition
completion
happened in 2004 . In Conclusion ,
Team
 A
got
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 the
last
 level in three
year
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years
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 and they got
second
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the second
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 price in one year. on
other
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 hand
team
B
 won
the
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all season but their
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performances
performance
performamces
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performance
 was not
a
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an
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 upward way
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words team, b, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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