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In the future, all cars,buses and trucks will be driver less.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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The revolution of technology takes us to an automated era. It allows Cars, Buses, and Trucks to move without any human touch. In the time come
this
 will be the trend all over the world. All the people which travelling with
vehicles
 without drivers will be a passenger. Among the pros and cons, I assume
this
 was a massive invention and revolution of these centuries
as well as
 advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
To Begin
, it can be seen, that technology was rapidly changing in these eras. AI and other inventions
such
 as Google Place, Earth and location service allow users to navigate things on Earth as per the requirements of users.
Thus
 automation of
vehicles
 or making
vehicles
 drive without any support of humans is a controversial subject these days.
Furthermore
, many pros can be discussed
such
 as minimizing of number of crashes on the road.
Vehicle
 automation uses several methods to identify the position of the
vehicle
.
Thus
,
vehicles
 attached cameras with sensors, GPS navigators, sensors and
in addition
 if needed satellite helps to measure the speed, pace and distance. It will help to minimize the opportunity for an accident.
Furthermore
,
secondly
, it allows to financially and physically comfortable ride to the passenger. Because it will reduce the stress of driving in heavy traffic
as well as
vehicles
 selecting the road shortest and the minimum traffic. No need for extra payment or a waste of
vehicles
.
On the other hand
, there would be considerable disadvantages as humans
it
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can be fallible
while
 creating the algorithm or a program or technological problem
such
 as signal or network failure or else bugs and cyber-attacks. All of these affect the accurate operation of the
vehicle
.
Thus
 the possibility of damage to passengers or goods that are transported. It was a considerable cost for the person who obtained the service
such
a
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vehicle
.
To conclude
, even though it has disadvantages advantages outweigh all of those.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout your essay.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and phrase your ideas more precisely.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to verb tenses and sentence structures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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