The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of spending on different things in
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the
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America in 1966 .
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, the chart
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expenditure for different 7 items which are
food
, cars ,petrol ,restaurant , furniture , computer and books the most spending during 1966 was
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food
while
the less was
computer
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. Looking in more detail the people in
USA
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in 1966 were spending a lot
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food
and
also
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items
such
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. The
percentage
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were 44% and 23% respectively . The spending
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very close for petrol fuel and furniture as
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the proportion for petrol was 9% and for furniture was 10% .
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less spending
in
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restaurants , books and computers . The expenditure
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computer items was the
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lowest
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between
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all things
then
the second few spending was books
then
takeaway
food
in contrast
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food
the
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were 1%,6% and 7%
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respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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