The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of spending on different things in
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the
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America in 1966 .
Overall
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, the chart
show
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expenditure for different 7 items which are
food
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, cars ,petrol ,restaurant , furniture , computer and books the most spending during 1966 was
for
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food
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while
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the less was
computer
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. Looking in more detail the people in
USA
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the USA
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in 1966 were spending a lot
for
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on
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food
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and
also
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for
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on
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transpositions
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items
such
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cars
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as cars
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. The
percentage
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were 44% and 23% respectively . The spending
were
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very close for petrol fuel and furniture as
sofa
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a sofa
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the proportion for petrol was 9% and for furniture was 10% .
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, the community
were
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less spending
in
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restaurants , books and computers . The expenditure
for
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computer items was the
less
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lowest
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between
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all things
then
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the second few spending was books
then
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takeaway
food
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in contrast
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with
food
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the
percentage
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were 1%,6% and 7%
respectievly
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respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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